PLEASE! PROOF READ FOR ME, It is due midnight..100 points for anyone it?

Question by boubacar b: PLEASE! PROOF READ FOR ME, It is due midnight..100 points for anyone it?
There are several great athletes who have behaved in such a way that they’re very poor role models for the young people who look up to them. Athletes are an inspiration to young people because they watch every move they make. For better or worse, young people observe and imitate their behaviors, actions, values, beliefs, and even their expressions. Modeling is important because it is the primary way that children learn the values they will carry for the rest of their lives.

Michael Phelps, the greatest swimmer, and one of the greatest Olympians of all time, has won 14 career Olympic gold medals, the most by won any Olympian. He has broken thirty-seven world records in swimming; however, he is a poor role model for young people. For instance, he recently revealed that he doesn’t worry about what he eats. He said that he can eat a high fat /high sugar diet and can still perform at peak levels. A typical example of his breakfast is as follows: Three fried-egg sandwiches, cheese, lettuce, tomatoes, fried onions and mayonnaise, 3 egg omelets and grits, 3 slices of French toast with powdered sugar, 3 chocolate chip pancakes, and 2 cups of coffee. Many adolescent children admire him should not aspire to this diet, for it is a recipe for disaster for youth health. This kind of diet is setting many youth up for many diseases in later life. For example, heart problems, vascular disease, and diabetes to name a few. Obesity is a major problem in our country and for those who do not exercise as much as Michael Phelps does, this diet could lead to that as well. I believe that this diet is certainly not a positive model for young people to follow.

Another example is Barry Bonds. He is listed at #6 on the sporting news list of the 100 Greatest Baseball Players which makes Bonds the highest-ranked active player in this sport. However, he recently revealed in the media that he has taken steroids to perform better on the field. For this, many consider him a cheater. For those young people who look up to him, this sends the message that it is cool to take steroids. When a role model makes a bad choice, some young people may actually see it as appropriate conduct for them to emulate because, their role model did it. Children need to learn that to participate in sport, a proper code of conduct is needed. Although it sometimes may seem unfair, rules keep the game worth participating in. Bonds has misguided those young adults who look up to him as role model. Simply because of his inappropriate conduct.

Michael Vick is an example of an elite football player for the Philadelphia Eagle of the National Football League, but he is a poor role model for the young people who look up to him. He chose to brutally abuse innocent dogs. This could lead young people to think that it is cool to abuse animals because their role model did. The extent of his wrong behavior is as follows: dog-fighting, gambling, tolerating drug-use and sales at these fights, and tax evasion. His methods of killing the dogs included drowning the dogs, electrocuting them and strangling them by hanging, badly treated all of his dogs. This is not a case of treating dogs royally until they lost a fight. This is an instance of a poor treated all of the dogs. In addition, yes, that included torture (which is often a means of “training” a dog for dog fighting).

In conclusion, these athletes chose to make a poor choices and some young people who looked up to them may be following their lead. Through ones actions, ones words, ones behavior and ones love, one can direct ones children toward the morals you want them to have. But these are irresponsible athlete; therefore, young adults and children should not look up to these athletes as role models.

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Answer by Sharon Wiliams
I would give you an “A”.

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PLEASE! PROOF READ FOR ME, It is due midnight..100 points for anyone it?

Question by boubacar b: PLEASE! PROOF READ FOR ME, It is due midnight..100 points for anyone it?
There are several great athletes who have behaved in such a way that they’re very poor role models for the young people who look up to them. Athletes are an inspiration to young people because they watch every move they make. For better or worse, young people observe and imitate their behaviors, actions, values, beliefs, and even their expressions. Modeling is important because it is the primary way that children learn the values they will carry for the rest of their lives.

Michael Phelps, the greatest swimmer, and one of the greatest Olympians of all time, has won 14 career Olympic gold medals, the most by won any Olympian. He has broken thirty-seven world records in swimming; however, he is a poor role model for young people. For instance, he recently revealed that he doesn’t worry about what he eats. He said that he can eat a high fat /high sugar diet and can still perform at peak levels. A typical example of his breakfast is as follows: Three fried-egg sandwiches, cheese, lettuce, tomatoes, fried onions and mayonnaise, 3 egg omelets and grits, 3 slices of French toast with powdered sugar, 3 chocolate chip pancakes, and 2 cups of coffee. Many adolescent children admire him should not aspire to this diet, for it is a recipe for disaster for youth health. This kind of diet is setting many youth up for many diseases in later life. For example, heart problems, vascular disease, and diabetes to name a few. Obesity is a major problem in our country and for those who do not exercise as much as Michael Phelps does, this diet could lead to that as well. I believe that this diet is certainly not a positive model for young people to follow.

Another example is Barry Bonds. He is listed at #6 on the sporting news list of the 100 Greatest Baseball Players which makes Bonds the highest-ranked active player in this sport. However, he recently revealed in the media that he has taken steroids to perform better on the field. For this, many consider him a cheater. For those young people who look up to him, this sends the message that it is cool to take steroids. When a role model makes a bad choice, some young people may actually see it as appropriate conduct for them to emulate because, their role model did it. Children need to learn that to participate in sport, a proper code of conduct is needed. Although it sometimes may seem unfair, rules keep the game worth participating in. Bonds has misguided those young adults who look up to him as role model. Simply because of his inappropriate conduct.

Michael Vick is an example of an elite football player for the Philadelphia Eagle of the National Football League, but he is a poor role model for the young people who look up to him. He chose to brutally abuse innocent dogs. This could lead young people to think that it is cool to abuse animals because their role model did. The extent of his wrong behavior is as follows: dog-fighting, gambling, tolerating drug-use and sales at these fights, and tax evasion. His methods of killing the dogs included drowning the dogs, electrocuting them and strangling them by hanging, badly treated all of his dogs. This is not a case of treating dogs royally until they lost a fight. This is an instance of a poor treated all of the dogs. In addition, yes, that included torture (which is often a means of “training” a dog for dog fighting).

In conclusion, these athletes chose to make a poor choices and some young people who looked up to them may be following their lead. Through ones actions, ones words, ones behavior and ones love, one can direct ones children toward the morals you want them to have. But these are irresponsible athlete; therefore, young adults and children should not look up to these athletes as role models.

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Answer by Cosimo )O(
First para, last sentence > Role models are important, because they are the …

Second para –
> high fat, high sugar diet – the slash / is not permitted in formal writing;
> typical breakfast is as follows: three … the colon does not mark the end of a sentence, hence no capital T
> use words, not numerals (two, three …)
> missing “who” after “children”

Third para, last sentence
> this is not a sentence (no verb) – should be joined to the previous sentence with a dash

Fourth para:
> poor treatment [not treated] of all dogs, including torture, which is often used as …

Last para:
> delete “a” in the first sentence
> in the second sentence, the pronouns are inconsistent – change all occurrences of “ones” to “your”
> last sentence: These athletes are irresponsible; therefore, … should not look up to them as role models.

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Question by deport_scum: Have you read this?
Feds defend Arpaio on crime sweeps
Immigration officials say sheriff is following law
221 commentsby Daniel González – Apr. 5, 2008 12:00 AM
The Arizona Republic
Top federal immigration officials on Friday defended Maricopa County Sheriff Joe Arpaio’s recent crime sweeps, rejecting critics’ arguments that the sheriff is violating an agreement that allows deputies to enforce immigration laws.

The officials made their remarks as 38 new officers at five Arizona law-enforcement agencies were sworn in to enforce federal immigration laws. The federally trained officers are members of the Phoenix Police Department, the Arizona Department of Public Safety, and the Pima, Pinal and Yavapai county sheriff’s offices. Now, with more than 200 trained officers and jail officials, Arizona has the most of any state in nation.

Asked about the intensifying controversy over sweeps in Phoenix and Guadalupe, Matthew Allen, newly appointed special agent in charge of Immigration and Customs Enforcement in Arizona, rebuffed accusations that Arpaio is conducting immigration raids masked as crime sweeps. Jim Pendergraph, who coordinates an ICE program that trains local police in immigration enforcement, agreed.

They said Arpaio is enforcing state laws and, in the process, arresting illegal immigrants, which is permitted under an agreement between ICE and the Sheriff’s Office.

“He has stayed within the bounds of the agreement,” Allen said.

Pendergraph said he even drove to Guadalupe on Thursday to see Arpaio’s operation for himself and “I saw nothing that gave me heartburn.”

The crime sweeps, held recently in largely immigrant and Hispanic neighborhoods in Guadalupe and Phoenix, have sparked large-scale protests accusing Arpaio of conducting immigration raids based on racial-profiling.

Phoenix Mayor Phil Gordon and Guadalupe Mayor Rebecca Jimenez have blasted the crime sweeps. Phoenix Police Chief Jack Harris also asked ICE officials to look into whether Arpaio’s crime sweeps were appropriate under the agreement.

Arpaio has maintained that he is not targeting suspects based on race and that the sweeps were in response to complaints of crime from business people and community leaders.

On Friday, he continued with a second day of sweeps in Guadalupe, despite the objections of the mayor and hundreds of protesters. He said he was considering doing more sweeps in Mesa after eight state legislators signed a letter asking him to focus his crime-suppression activities on the southeast Valley.

“We are going to arrest any illegal immigrants we come across,” Arpaio said.

Arpaio’s deputies are allowed to double as immigration agents under a federal program known as 287 (g). The program also allows jail personnel to identify foreign-born criminals in jails and prisons and process them for deportation.

Most of the seven Arizona agencies participating in the program have 10 or fewer officers and jail officials trained in immigration enforcement. The Maricopa County Sheriff’s Office has 160.

Congressional auditors are conducting a probe of the program to see how well it is working in Arizona and other parts of the country. Their report is expected in the fall.

The additional Arizona officers sworn in Friday raised questions about whether more immigration sweeps will take place in other parts of the state.

Alessandra Soler Meetze, executive director of the American Civil Liberties Union of Arizona, said she fears more local police will question drivers about their immigration status during traffic stops. That could lead to civil-rights violations and racial-profiling involving immigrants and U.S. citizens, she said.

But law-enforcement officials insisted Friday that they do not plan to use ICE-trained officers to do crime sweeps similar to Arpaio’s. Instead, the officers will be used for targeted operations aimed at arresting and deporting foreign-born criminals tied to immigrant and drug-smuggling and other criminal rings, they said.

One sergeant and four detectives from the Phoenix violent-crimes bureau completed the four-week ICE training, the first in the department to do so.

The department in recent months has taken heat from both sides of the immigration debate. Border-control advocates want the agency to get more involved in arresting illegal immigrants, and immigrant advocates say immigration enforcement should be left to the federal government.

Joe Klima, commander of the Phoenix violent-crimes bureau, said the five officers will go after violent criminals associated with human-smuggling organizations.

“We will not use this for routine immigration enforcement,” Klima said.

Pinal County Sheriff Chris Vasquez did not rule out the possibility that his five newly trained deputies will be used to arrest illegal immigrants following traffic stops, but that will not be the main focus. The deputies will instead focus on combating smuggling groups that transport illegal immigrants through Pinal County. The county is a major corridor for transporting illegal immigrants and drugs from the border into the United States, Vasquez said.
Don’t you just wish Sheriff Joe was running for President, instead of those three LOSERS?

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Answer by mike sapra
nope

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Teen Female Modeling!! plz read this, and help me!!?

Question by -[morqan♥]: Teen Female Modeling!! plz read this, and help me!!?
ok well im a “model in training” i guess you could say, and well im sooo scared that my agent and other people are gonna tell me i have to lose weight. my body isnt fat AT ALL….its just the simple fact that i actually have an a**, and thick thighs but not overly thick, and breast…seriously, and i dont wanna lose them. soo what do i do???

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Answer by caitlyn b
you stop modling

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